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Shot in the dark

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A curtain
of oily black webs
Thoughts that last
Between the screaming scenes.

A shirt on
tattered up to shreds
dirtied fast:
blood seeping from it's seams.

A sun
withered and frail
rotten brown
and burnt itself to dust.
i like the 3rd stanza the most i think, editted it in on Oct 1st
not sure if the 2nd stanza really goes with the whole poem...i'd be grateful of any comments in general or abut that.
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Obsidian-Nightfall's avatar
The second line brings such imagery to mind though, it must stay... I really like this though hun... Great work...
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